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Uber
« on: August 11, 2020, 10:35:37 PM »
Author's Note:  This was written in a screenplay template in Word, but I'm still figuring out how this site works.

“UBER”

By

Lt. Broccoli

 
FADE IN:

INT. MINIVAN - NIGHT

A haggard looking man in his late 30’s sits in the driver’s seat of a minivan.  His eyes scan the road, paying attention for other drivers all while looking for his destination.  JIMMY DEE’S BAR.

The DRIVER activates his turn signal and pulls over.  He grabs his phone from the holder and presses an “ARRIVED” button.  A moment later he sends a text.

DRIVER (TEXT)
This is Jimmy from Uber.  I’m outside in the tan minivan.

KIRA (TEXT)
OMW.

A beat.  

The Driver looks at the clock. 1:31 AM.  A group of young men leave the bar, yelling at each other playfully.  A man and a woman leave arm in arm and sloppily make out up against a telephone pole.  

Three young women stagger out of the bar, holding onto each other.  The two on the outside are holding up, nearly dragging the one in the middle.  They approach the van.  The woman on the end knocks on the window.  The Driver lowers it.

KIRA
You Jimmy?

DRIVER
Yeah, that’s me.  Hop in and buckle up.

The Driver opened the side door.  The two women on the ends helped the one in the middle into the back row and buckled her in.  The other two sat in the Captain’s Chairs in the middle row.  Once they were inside the Driver closed the side door.

The women were dressed for the club.  

A woman with blonde hair, light skin, and above average height sat behind the driver.  She wore a light, tight dress that ended mid-thigh and a pair of 3” heels that matched her dress.  Her makeup was well done, but starting to show wear from being in a hot club all night.

The other woman up front was even taller, with long dark hair that fell to her ample breasts.  She wore a simple little black dress with spaghetti straps that stopped mid-thigh as well.  Her 4” heels made her appear like a giant when she stood outside.

The woman in the back was shorter, but still well dressed and just as gorgeous as the other two.  She was already passed out on the back seat.

DRIVER
Where to?


The two women looked at each other, steadying themselves as they sat.  The brunette spoke up.


KIRA
1345 Locust Grove Drive.  Out by the hills.

The Driver typed the address into his phone, then started the route.

GPS
Starting route...


The Driver looked at the ETA on the screen.  Then he looked back at the women in his van.  He placed the phone back in its holder, pulled out into traffic.

BLONDE
Hey, can you turn some music on? Like, some dance stuff?

DRIVER
Sure


The Driver turned on the stereo, playing some dance music.  He kept his eyes on the road until he was a couple blocks from the bar.

The girls up front talked to each other, trying to talk over the music.  They looked amazing.

DRIVER
Listen, it’s gonna be a while to get there, about an hour with traffic.  You want some water?

BLONDE
Sure.


The Driver slid back the center console, exposing 8 bottles of water.  6 had no special markings.  Two of them had “Curtesy of Uber” stickers on the caps.  He grabbed the two with the stickers and handed them to the women.  Kira grabbed the bottles.  She gave one to her friend and kept the other.

DRIVER
By the way, I’m Jimmy.

KIRA
I’m Kira, that’s Peyton, and our friend back there is Jade.

DRIVER
Nice to meet y’all.  Any special reason for coming out tonight, or just wanna dance?

PEYTON
Jade just flew into town and we haven’t seen her in like FOR EVER.

DRIVER
Cool, y’all go to school or something.

KIRA
Something.


The radio played a different song

KIRA
Ohh, that’s my shit right there, turn it up!


The Driver turned up the volume.  He saw both women open the bottles and start drinking.  He smiled.

FLASHBACK TO:


INT. DRIVER’S APARTMENT – DAY

The Driver sat at a table, several water bottles sat off to the side.  Music played from a phone sitting on the table.  The driver grabbed a bottle of water from the pack and held it upside down on the table.  He picked up a small power drill and carefully drilled a tiny hole in the bottom center, where the plastic was mold injected.  After making and clearing the hole, he put down the drill and grabbed a syringe full of clear liquid and squirted it into the hole.  The Driver then carefully cleaned the area with a towel, then used a hot glue gun to seal it up.  After making sure that it didn’t leak, he turned the bottle right-side up and put a “Curtesy of Uber” sticker on the cap.

INT. MINIVAN – NIGHT

The music was still bumping in the van, but the women weren’t.  They passed out in their seats, bottles of water nearly emptied.  Peyton’s head fell onto her shoulders while Kira’s head fell back against the headrest.

The Driver paused the directions on the phone and turned down a side road.  

EXT. SIDE ROAD - NIGHT

The minivan drove down a bumpy side road.

EXT. ABANDONED QUARRY - NIGHT

The Driver pulled in to an abandoned quarry.  He drove to a secluded spot and parked the van, then turned off the engine.

The Driver exited the van and walked to the rear, opening the tailgate.  He grabbed a blanket and a small bookbag.  He spread out the blanket by the passenger side door.

He opened the door and took a long, hard look at Kira.  She looked amazing.  Her skin was tanned, her tits were firm, and legs were muscular.

The Driver checked her breathing.  She was alive.  He shook her head gently to wake her.  No response.  He reached over her and unbuckled her seatbelt.  No response.  He grabbed her left tit and squeezed.  No response, and no bra.  The Driver took off her heels.

The Driver pulled Kira out of the van with some effort, sitting her on the floor of the van before laying her down on the blanket.  Her skirt bunched up around her waist, exposing a tiny black thong.  He reached under Kira’s butt, grabbed the panty waistline, and pulled them up and off her legs.  He placed them in her heels, so he wouldn’t forget them.

The Driver opened his bag grabbed a bottle of KY Jelly.  He spread Kira’s legs open and rubbed a generous amount of jelly on her bare pussy and inside of her vulva.

The Driver unfastened his jeans and kneeled between Kira’s legs.  He pushed his jeans and underwear down in one motion.  He inched closer to her as his erection was freed from his pants.

The Driver spread Kira’s pussy lips open with his left hand while holding his cock with his right.  He pushed, his cockhead passing into her tight love canal.  He held still for a moment, savoring the feeling of being inside her, before he pumped in and out of her.

As he fucked Kira, the Driver pulled the spaghetti straps of her dress down, exposing her tits.  They were at least a 36C, maybe D.  He grabbed them, kneaded them, pinched them, licked them, and bit them, but not hard enough to leave a mark.

After a few minutes, the Driver’s thrusts increased in speed and his breath quickened.  He was close.  After a moment, he planted his seed deep into Kira’s womb as he came.

The Driver collapsed, laying on top of her for a moment before pulling out.  He reached into his bag and grabbed a few wet wipes and cleaned up the both of them, paying special attention to her cunt and the cum leaking out of it.  Once done, he dressed her, fixing her dress and putting her panties back on.

He struggled for a moment to get her back in her seat, but once she was in, he buckled her up and closed her door.

The Driver threw the dirty wipes in a plastic shopping bag he kept in his bookbag, then dragged everything over to his side of the van, spreading the blanket out yet again.

He opened the sliding door and saw Peyton sprawled and slumped over.  He checked to make sure she was still alive and how she reacted by caressing her face then grabbing her tit through her dress.  She wasn’t wearing a bra, either.

The Driver unbuckled her seatbelt and pulled her out of the van.  She landed half in, half out with her stomach on the floor and her lower half hanging out of the van.  

He admired the view for a moment before pulling Peyton’s dress up over her hips.  She wasn’t wearing any panties.  His dick got hard looking at her tight little ass and perfectly trimmed pussy.

The Driver grabbed the KY Jelly again, this time applying it to Peyton’s pussy, as well as a generous coating on his own dick.  

He kneeled down behind her, bent over in the van’s doorway, and slid his dick into her quim with some resistance.  After a minute he built up a rhythm and fucked Peyton as he grabbed her hips.

The Driver didn’t last long.  After a couple minutes at most, he picked up the pace and thrust into the blonde hard as he came.  Sweat dripped down his forehead as he pulled his cum-covered dick out of Peyton.  He caught his breath for a moment before cleaning her up, dressing her, and putting her back in her seat, buckled.

The Driver grabbed two clean bottles of water from the center console.  He marked the drugged water levels with his finger, then emptied the fresh bottles to those points.  He dumped out the tainted waters and put the empty bottles and unmarked caps in the trash.  He placed the marked caps on the clean bottles and put them back with the girls.

He put his bookbag and blanket in the trunk of the minivan, then climbed back in the driver’s seat.  He started the car and buckled up.  He looked back at this handiwork.

Kira was back in the same position she passed out in, but was starting to move a little.  Peyton was still zonked out and was now snoring.  The young woman in the back seat, Jade, was still sleeping.  

The Driver turned on the GPS and the music down.

GPS
Recalculating Route.


EXT. ABANDONED QUARRY – NIGHT

The minivan shifted into gear and drove off.

MONTAGE
- The minivan drives through the country.  Music plays through the stereo.
- The Driver sees the women slowly wake up.
- The minivan drives into the suburbs, stopping at stoplights.
- Jade sleeps in the back seat.
- The minivan heads to a nice suburban neighborhood.
- Peyton starts rolling her head.
- The minivan pulls up to a house with the numbers “1345” illuminated.  The vehicle stops.

INT. MINIVAN – NIGHT

The Driver looked in the mirror as he drove.  Kira started to wake and move in her seat.

DRIVER
Hey.  HEY!


Kira moves a little more.  She’s still groggy and under the influence of the alcohol and date rape drug.

KIRA
(Slurring)
What?  Where are we?

DRIVER
We’re here.  1345 Locust Grove Road.  Time to get out.


Kira couldn’t focus on the Driver.  She tried to sit up, but nearly fell over.

DRIVER
You gonna be okay getting to the door?  You’re not looking so good.  I’ll help you to the door.


The Driver turned off the engine and exited the car.  

EXT. 1345 LOCUST GROVE ROAD - NIGHT

He opened Kira’s door, helped her unbuckle her seatbelt, and grabbed her shoes and purses.  He helped her exit the minivan and walked her to the front door.

As they approached the front door, the porch light turned on.  A man with thinning grey hair wearing a bathrobe opened the door.

MAN
Who are you?


The Driver stopped a few feet from the door, Kira slumped on his shoulder.

DRIVER
I’m Jimmy from Uber.  Kira and Peyton gave me this address.

MAN
You’ve got Peyton with you, too?  I’m Kira’s dad, Jack.

KIRA
Hey!


Kira yelled from the Driver’s shoulder.

DRIVER
Sir, could you give me a hand?  She’s not as light as she looks, and she’s the best off of the three.


The Driver walked Kira over to Jack, who fell into his arms.

JACK
You said three of them?

DRIVER
Yeah, Jade’s in the back seat.  I just hope she didn’t make a mess.  I’ll get the next girl.  You got Kira?

JACK
Uh huh.


Jack led, nearly dragged Kira into his house, dropping her on the couch.

The Driver returned to the van and tried to wake up Peyton.  She was out of it.  He unbuckled her from the seat and hoisted her up onto his shoulder in a fireman’s carry.  It took some serious effort not to drop her, but he got Peyton to the porch.

Jack directed him to the couch, where he dropped her next to Kira.  The Driver went onto the porch to catch his breath.

JACK
Who’s left?


The Driver bent over as he spoke.

DRIVER
Jade.  She’s the smallest, but was the most drunk and in the back seat.  

JACK
Give me a moment.


Jack stepped inside out of sight for a moment, then returned, wearing a pair of tennis shoes.

JACK
Let’s go.


The Driver and Jack walked to the van.  

INT. MINIVAN - NIGHT

Jack and the Driver climbed into the back of the van where Jade slept.  The Driver shook Jade a couple times.  She didn’t budge.  He unbuckled her seatbelt.  Jack grabbed her arms as the Driver grabbed her legs.  They picked her up and maneuvered her out of the van.

EXT. 1345 LOCUST GROVE RD – NIGHT

The two men carried Jade to the porch.  They stopped.  Jack was huffing and puffing.

JACK
Just, just give me a sec.


INT. 1345 LOCUST GROVE RD LIVING ROOM – NIGHT

The nicely furnished living room had a large couch along the back wall facing the window and a love seat against the back wall.  A table sat in the middle of the room.  End tables with lamps flanked the couch and the love seat.

Kira and Peyton crashed on the couch.  Kira moved every minute but Peyton was out.

The two men entered and carried Jade to the love seat.  Jack lost his footing and landed on it, taking Jade with him.  She fell on top of him, her dress riding up her legs and over her hips.  Jack sat there for a moment, admiring the view before the Driver spoke.

DRIVER
I’ll be back in a sec, wanna make sure I got everything before I leave.


Jack nodded.  The Driver left the living room.

A beat.

The Driver returned, carrying a pair of shoes and a purse.  He talked as he came back in.

DRIVER
I found some of their stuff, don’t see anything else so I’m...


The Driver stopped in his tracks as he saw Jack, rubbing Jade’s pussy with his right hand and groping her tits with his left.  Her head flopped onto his shoulder.

JACK
You’ve been very helpful tonight and deserve a tip.  You see that wallet on the end table next to the door?


The Driver turned and saw it.

JACK
Yeah, that one.  How about you reach in and grab some cash out of there.


The Driver picked up the wallet.

DRIVER
How much?

JACK
How much is in there?


The Driver counted the money.

DRIVER
About $300.

JACK
Take it, it’s yours.  You earned it.

DRIVER
Thanks.


The Driver walked to the door.

JACK
You didn’t see anything did you?


Jack was busy finger banging Jade as he pulled her dress down enough to expose her tits.

DRIVER
See what?

JACK
Exactly.  Have a good night.  Close the door on your way out.

DRIVER
You too.


The Driver left the house with a huge smirk on his face, knowing that he fucked both Peyton and Kira, Jack’s daughter.  Jack smiled as he pushed Jade’s head down to his crotch as the Driver closed the door behind him.

FADE OUT.
« Last Edit: August 14, 2020, 02:45:20 PM by LtBroccoli »
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Re: Uber
« Reply #1 on: August 12, 2020, 06:02:28 AM »
Great story which earns you a merit from me and hope that you fair well in the contest!

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Re: Uber
« Reply #2 on: August 14, 2020, 02:17:29 PM »
Ooo, I want to see this on film!  Gotta say, I was really hoping the girls would forget all about Jade in the back and the Driver would get to keep her, but I can't really think of how he could get away with that, long-term.  Much better having her friend's Daddy rape her instead!  Merit!
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Re: Uber
« Reply #3 on: August 14, 2020, 03:02:12 PM »
Thanks guys. 

B&G, I did think about them leaving Jade for a minute or having some fun with her back at the quarry, but I felt that was getting repetitive and I was flirting the word limit.  I toyed with a few other ideas like leaving them or selling them off didn't fit with the tone.  In the end, the daddy being a dirty old man just came when I had nothing else left for Jade to do.  Also, it gives the Driver an out.  Who's to say that daddy only plays with Jade?  >:D
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Re: Uber
« Reply #4 on: August 14, 2020, 04:26:21 PM »
Oh, I agree that Jade's rape could have waited for another episode, and who knows?  Maybe this show will have a spinoff: "Peyton's Place"!  :angel:
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Re: Uber
« Reply #5 on: August 20, 2020, 06:18:03 AM »
Good story with a nice twist at the end. And doing it in screenplay mode is impressive - great job.
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« Reply #6 on: August 20, 2020, 02:44:24 PM »
Thanks Seeker.  That twist wasn't planned until the very final scene when I realized I introduced Jade but didn't get a chance to use her.  Like Chekov said, if you introduce a gun in Act 1, it better be used by the end of Act 2.
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« Reply #7 on: August 21, 2020, 03:27:07 AM »
Good Story!!
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Re: Uber
« Reply #8 on: November 10, 2020, 01:29:45 PM »
Apologies LtBroccoli, my long overdue merit for your screenplay! Uber was the first story I read after registering and I enjoyed Jimmy's non-chalant banter and your effective 'scene cuts'(I don't remember what they are called?). Made my skin crawl in all the right ways. Your Chester County stories are fun reads so far and also THANK YOU for your impeccably organized 'Holodeck Files'. Lol - I can't imagine how clean your desk looks.

EDIT - Rachel taught me how to give merits properly! lol.
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« Reply #9 on: November 10, 2020, 02:11:58 PM »
Apologies LtBroccoli, I still owe you one overdue merit for your screenplay! Uber was the first story I read after registering and I enjoyed Jimmy's non-chalant banter and your effective 'scene cuts'(I don't remember what they are called?). Made my skin crawl in all the right ways. Your Chester County stories are fun reads so far and also THANK YOU for your impeccably organized 'Holodeck Files'. Lol - I can't imagine how clean your desk looks.

Thank you.  The scene cuts are just scene cuts, but the descriptions like "INT. OFFICE - DAY" are called slug lines, used to show where the scene takes place, whether it is inside or an exterior shot, what the location is, and what time of day.  They can get more specific, but the general rule of thumb with screenplays is stay general until you need to be specific.

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