Author Topic: Why Did I Walk Home Alone That Night  (Read 944 times)

SheerHose33
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Why Did I Walk Home Alone That Night
« on: September 15, 2019, 07:29:40 AM »
Why Did I Walk Home Alone That Night



Never ever walk home on you’re own
Please Make sure you at least have your phone
You never know what lurks after dark
Behind a bush in the dim lit park
Following you on your lonely stroll
Waiting under the bridge like a troll

Take my bag, take my phone, take it and flee
But you want more, you want me
You want this body as yours you see,
Why did I wear a skirt tonight?
I can wear what I want, it’s only right
Now taken and laid flat on the grass
It all seems so blurry, it all seems so fast

The dead but powerful  weight gets on top
I can’t even scream, as his pants did drop
I can barely breath with the intense pain
No one will hear me down this dark lane
I’m alone with this monster so ravaging
His touch and manner so revolting and savaging,
Then he finished in almost a rush
A grunt, a growl a scalding gush
Then he whispers In my ear
Tell anyone and you’re dead do you hear?

Then the dead weight lifts off me is it the end?
I’m lying, half naked, in so much pain to comprehend,
He runs off Into the black , like a fox
The darkness surrounds me it almost mocks
How I got home I cannot remember
This month will never end, this late November,  

For the rest of my life, I’ll ask why?
Why didn’t I listen? why? I shall cry
When I sleep it shall be restless  and of fear
I’ll sleep always with one open ear,
I won’t forget the darkness, the terror  
The pain, the anguish the invasion,the horror.
Why did I walk home alone that night?
I thought I was ok, I thought wrong,  alright!


« Last Edit: September 30, 2019, 04:17:52 PM by Jessica_33 »

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Re: Why Did I Walk Home Alone That Night
« Reply #1 on: September 15, 2019, 09:50:16 AM »
Very powerful and cautionary tale in poetry form. I have to admit it took me by surprise and I had to read it twice to fully appreciate it.
Talented and strong words. Very much a welcome addition to this section and I know the thoughts of the victim very well.
Why should we feel that we did something wrong? It's the right to walk as we want and wear what we want.
Deeply powerful Jess. Greatly appreciated here and a merit as soon as I'm allowed to bequeath it to you!! Xxx
« Last Edit: September 15, 2019, 01:40:10 PM by Rachel_Thornton »

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Re: Why Did I Walk Home Alone That Night
« Reply #2 on: September 15, 2019, 10:21:33 AM »
Very powerful and cautionary tale in poetry form. I have to admit it took me by surprise and I had to read it twice to fully appreciate it.
Talented and strong words. Very much a welcome addition to this section and I know the thoughts of the victim very well.
Why should we feel that we did something wrong? It's the right to walk as we want and wear what we want.
Deeply powerful Jess. Greatly appreciated!

If this doesn't scream for a full story treatment by you Jessica, nothing ever will! The sense of dread we know will come, the setting, the aftermath all leaves the reader shocked and appalled at what happened. you know a merit comes from me for this!

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Re: Why Did I Walk Home Alone That Night
« Reply #3 on: September 15, 2019, 04:55:23 PM »
I struggled reading your poem dear Jess
Your prose reveals a talented poet(ess)
It worked exactly like an upheld mirror
Causing me to shake and horribly shiver
O'erpowered, helpless with tears a falling
No one to hear a pained heart a calling
He tore his pleasure in complete disregard
of another's suff'ring, a life ruined so hard
There's no full recov'ry from such an attack
Be assured that Karma will one day strike back
I struggled with and for you dear Jess

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Re: Why Did I Walk Home Alone That Night
« Reply #4 on: September 15, 2019, 05:03:52 PM »
That was beautiful Evie. Just an idea I came up with about walking home at night.
As Rachel says poems can bring out much stronger feelings than stories sometimes
Loved your poem and it’s merit worthy in itself. Thank you all. I’m still new to the poem game
Yes Graham I think there is a story there.
Rachel thank you your words of review  are always beautiful to read.

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Re: Why Did I Walk Home Alone That Night
« Reply #5 on: September 17, 2019, 09:24:09 AM »
Wow Jess. Such well described horror, despair and undeserved guilt. Yes the short sharp staccato of the poem drives the emotion and the pain even harder than prose. Wonderful work. and accept my respectful merit
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Re: Why Did I Walk Home Alone That Night
« Reply #6 on: September 28, 2019, 12:49:10 PM »
How I'm blazed did I ever miss this gem? 
So full of tense emotion. And regret.  Beautifully done.