Author Topic: Relax, my pet  (Read 531 times)

darklord
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Relax, my pet
« on: August 06, 2019, 07:43:59 PM »
Relax, my pet said the spider to the fly.
He grabbed her after school as she happened by.
naked she sits, too scared to even cry.
A cuff on legs and arms, a rag over the eyes.

Knees bent back, legs spread obscene.
The spider peers at what is between.
Tender pink folds; a dark hole below,
it's time to deflower this little teen.

Naked comes the fly, his weapon like hardened steel,
A scream, a wail, a burning pain she does feel.

Thrusting, lunging, no mercy to be found,
the spider ravishes the fly as eagerly he does pound.
The venom builds inside his veins,
As poor fly on the floor weeps and strains.

He fills her void with vile seed, nothing to restrain.
tears from her eyes tell the story of her pain.

Relax, my pet said the spider to the fly,
I will return at dawn, once again to make you cry.

Fly weeps and wails as in darkness she is closed.
Bound naked she lies in crude repose.

Relax, my pet rings in fly's ears.
she sobs and sobs, oh the bitter tears.

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Re: Relax, my pet
« Reply #1 on: August 06, 2019, 08:30:00 PM »
Great effort. I'm enjoying your poetic side darklord.
"Knowing your own darkness is the best method for dealing with the darkness of other people." Karl Jung.
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Re: Relax, my pet
« Reply #2 on: August 07, 2019, 11:40:26 AM »
Another merit worthy work by you my friend and when the site allows it be added to you! leave it to you to adapt the old rhyme 'The Spider and The Fly!" to an abduction story!

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Re: Relax, my pet
« Reply #3 on: August 07, 2019, 12:44:27 PM »
Again another wonderful look into your mind from a poetic standpoint and once again you take a premise that has been done in story form and made it work in a poetic fashion.
The metaphors of the spider holding its captive and essentially toying and playing with her are blinding. The spider keeping its "lunch" for a later day when it needs more.
Comparing the spiders venom to a mans ejaculation is harsh but astounding. Really good work again and I have no choice but to issue you a merit for this delight.

darklord
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Re: Relax, my pet
« Reply #4 on: August 07, 2019, 03:05:02 PM »
Many thanks to all.  Appreciate the comments very much.

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Re: Relax, my pet
« Reply #5 on: August 08, 2019, 04:57:36 AM »
Another top poem here. Excellently crafted and with soul cutting imagery
“He fills her void with his seed, nothing to restrain”
Says it all. Merit for this work and more contributions to this interesting section.

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Re: Relax, my pet
« Reply #6 on: August 08, 2019, 11:14:13 PM »
An excellent job, darklord, and worthy of joining all your other great literary works!
I could rape your pussy, but I'd be in and out in a few minutes. So I choose to rape your mind, and I'll be inside you forever!