Author Topic: Off The Grid: Melanie, Michelle, and Maria  (Read 15094 times)

Jed
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Re: Off The Grid: Melanie, Michelle, and Maria
« Reply #15 on: March 17, 2013, 09:16:37 AM »
All right Jed! Great new chapter! I was wondering when some new stuff was coming. And speaking of new stuff, you will be pleased to know I have been working on my Taylor story and expect to post some new material in the next couple days.

I was wondering if you would get back to Taylor.  Jenna doesn't appear to be finished doing chores either.  Will either or both girls have to continue pleasing the neighbor or step-brother well into future?

I just posted Part V to this story.  It was written a while ago, but I decided to add more in the middle of the story.  I have an epilogue written and will post tonight.

I think I'm going back to SciFi for a while and maybe add more to "A thing for Asians."

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Re: Off The Grid: Melanie, Michelle, and Maria
« Reply #16 on: March 17, 2013, 09:41:10 AM »
Yes, I have a few more chapters planned for Taylor. Jenna will continue too. As you probably noticed, the story is on Day 2 and there will be Day 3, but that will be all for that story. Then I have about 3 or 4 story ideas after that to develop. Always coming up with new stuff! LOL.

Can't wait to read more of your Sci-fi material!
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Re: Off The Grid: Melanie, Michelle, and Maria
« Reply #17 on: March 17, 2013, 12:39:26 PM »
Wow! Quite the ending! Good story Jed!
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Re: Off The Grid: Melanie, Michelle, and Maria
« Reply #18 on: March 17, 2013, 04:36:00 PM »
Great Ending! Great Story!

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Re: Off The Grid: Melanie, Michelle, and Maria
« Reply #19 on: March 17, 2013, 04:39:50 PM »
Thank you vile8r and wolfshark.  I guess I'll go ahead and post the epilogue that I wrote at the same time as the first chapter.

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Re: Off The Grid: Melanie, Michelle, and Maria
« Reply #20 on: March 17, 2013, 04:42:15 PM »
Epilogue

Two years after the last heist, the man who was at times referred to as the Boss walked down the hall of a Mexican whorehouse owned by a friend of his.  He hadn’t seen Gomez in several months.  As he walked past the rooms he peaked in at the girls to see what the current talent looked like.  Glancing in one room he saw a small pretty Gringa girl on her knees on a cot giving what looked like a very professional blowjob.  He started to walk onwards, but stopped and went back to look again.  Chuckling he continued down the hall, and seeing Gomez gave him a big greeting, “Gomez, so good to see you!”
Gomez responded, “Mi amigo!  Como está!”
They exchanged pleasantries for several minutes, and then the Boss asked, “The girl in the third room to the left, how long has she been here?”
Gomez said, “About four months.  She is very popular.  A large group of men come here every Saturday just for her.  She is usually sore until Tuesday.  You want me to get her?”
The Boss responded, “Sure, why not.”

The girl was brought before the Boss, and he spoke in English, “Do you remember me Melanie?”
The girl responded in Spanish, “No one calls me that anymore.”
He continued in English, “Yes, but do you remember me?”
She gave him a look and switching to English asked, “Are you one of the guys that fucks me on Saturday?”
The Boss said, “No, I’m the guy that fucked you first.”
She stared at him for a few seconds and said, “Yeah, I remember you.”  The girl was wearing a ragged T-shirt that hung past her waist and nothing else.
He spoke again, “Where are your sisters Maria and Michelle?”
The girl responded, “I don’t know.  They were sold before me.”
The Boss asked, “Do you think they are working in a place like this?”
“Yeah,” said Melanie.
The Boss moved his hands under her shirt and began squeezing her ample breasts, “You have filled out nicely Melanie.  I remember these as being smaller.  How old are you now?  16?”
“I don’t know.  Maybe?” responded Melanie.
The Boss continued, “Do you know what month it is?”
She said, “I know when it’s Saturday.”
The Boss pulled on her breasts downwards, and Melanie went to her knees.  She began opening his pants.  Working his cock out of his shorts, she took it in her mouth and began moving her head.  The Boss with his hands in her hair spoke one more time, “It’s nice to see you again Melanie.”

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Re: Off The Grid: Melanie, Michelle, and Maria
« Reply #21 on: March 17, 2013, 09:32:28 PM »
Nice ending with Melanie!  Great story!  Can't wait for more!

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Re: Off The Grid: Melanie, Michelle, and Maria
« Reply #22 on: March 19, 2013, 02:39:40 AM »
WOW! Melanie's just totally mindfucked! Great epilogue, jed!
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Re: Off The Grid: Melanie, Michelle, and Maria
« Reply #23 on: April 01, 2013, 08:11:59 PM »
Missed this before . Just have to coment its  a great story ! Love the bad ending . Or should I say super hot ending ... Yay

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Re: Off The Grid: Melanie, Michelle, and Maria
« Reply #24 on: April 02, 2013, 08:55:58 PM »
The ending is rather grim.  In general, I'm not a big fan of endings like this as a reader.  I seem to have written more than just this one as ending bad.  The Reverend Josiah Bright also ended bad.

I'm glad it was enjoyed and glad it was fiction.

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Re: Off The Grid: Melanie, Michelle, and Maria
« Reply #25 on: April 02, 2013, 09:38:16 PM »
The ending is rather grim.  In general, I'm not a big fan of endings like this as a reader.  I seem to have written more than just this one as ending bad.  The Reverend Josiah Bright also ended bad.

I'm glad it was enjoyed and glad it was fiction.
That's what makes it great. Because it IS fiction!
I could rape your pussy, but I'd be in and out in a few minutes. So I choose to rape your mind, and I'll be inside you forever!

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Re: Off The Grid: Melanie, Michelle, and Maria
« Reply #26 on: August 26, 2017, 02:19:20 PM »
I like this story .Good idea!

Jed
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Re: Off The Grid: Melanie, Michelle, and Maria
« Reply #27 on: August 26, 2017, 02:45:54 PM »
Why thank you.  You had to look back a few years to find it.

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Re: Off The Grid: Melanie, Michelle, and Maria
« Reply #28 on: August 29, 2017, 09:55:25 AM »
Great story thank you