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 on: Today at 10:04:47 PM 
Started by NathanL - Last post by purechinadoll
Oxford -- example:  The large ears of this species may be an adaptation to foraging on moths or to foraging as gleaners.

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 on: Today at 09:59:02 PM 
Started by gscmar64 - Last post by Nyx
Honestly, that seems kinda stupid. In this Texas case there was proof she was lying. If they just didn't find any proof of an assault in your Toronto case, that doesn't seem sufficient enough to charge anyone. Of course I know firsthand that there are police officers who are absolutely full of shit, so who knows.

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 on: Today at 09:50:32 PM 
Started by darklord - Last post by Nyx
It happened in Texas. The age of consent there is 17 and the article said the dude was 17. Maybe there's proof they were having sex before he turned 17.

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 on: Today at 09:41:06 PM 
Started by Nyx - Last post by Nyx
What?

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 on: Today at 09:18:01 PM 
Started by GEMINIGUY - Last post by GEMINIGUY
"No More Lies"
Michel'Le




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 on: Today at 08:17:03 PM 
Started by GEMINIGUY - Last post by gscmar64
"The Story In Your Eyes"

The Moody Blues

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 on: Today at 08:15:31 PM 
Started by pisseddawg - Last post by SoftGameHunter
Please try to break this down to paragraphs- wall of words tends to turn most readers off!

Like the scenario, presented lots of possibilities to continue

One critique- you wrote "Unzipping her pants I reach down and feel the front of her silk panties" yet later you wrote "I pull my knife from pants and cut her jeans off.  As I cut up the back of her leg to her ass I can see the tiny black thong she's wearing" Why do that when all you had to do is slide her pants off and toss them aside?

Overall I say this is a good start
Agree on a good setting and also a good, angry protagonist. I also like the tall, curvy, fleshy victim.

It's up to pisseddawg, of course, but maybe he doesn't want to leave her with intact clothing. She may have to do a hell of a streak to leave the venue afterwards. We shall see.  Cheesy

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 on: Today at 08:07:41 PM 
Started by SoftGameHunter - Last post by SoftGameHunter
I will give it a try.
Thanks, and let us know where to look.

Congrats on your inaugural post, BTW.

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 on: Today at 07:58:23 PM 
Started by Nyx - Last post by gscmar64
Understanding i have eat raw hamburger and you will be killing someone- yourself! So kill somebody

Eat a diet of chicken or red meat

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 on: Today at 07:54:00 PM 
Started by SoftGameHunter - Last post by Wack3d
I will give it a try.

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